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Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Elderly
people
 argue that everyone should follow traditional rules, and younger
people
 are inclined to recourse to alternative social norms for **sustainable** development. Notwithstanding,
traditions
 are an important reminder of meaningful
experience
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 in the past, I completely agree that modern society needs to evade using them for social regulation. Humanity needs to get rid
off
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traditions
 because in order to create something new innovators should break old rules by looking from different angles and using innovative approaches towards well-known problems. First of all, it prevents
think-tanks
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 from being creative which means that
further
 development stagnates.
Secondly
, old ways of thinking do not correlate with new circumstances, so rules and laws need to be changed to reflect adequately the current situation.
For example
, because of
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outbreak
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, the legislation in many countries does not correspond with
new
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 digital world and should be changed
in
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the
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 fast pace.
However
,
traditions
 can serve as a constant reminder of meaningful lessons of the past in order to convey
experience
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experiences
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 from
previous
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the previous
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generation
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generations
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 to the following. Nowadays, in different
cultures
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 public holidays are set
due to
 the payment of respect to the predecessors (e.g. day of memory of wars or government repressions victims).
This
 tradition helps
people
 to remember
about
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mistakes of the past and prevent similar
sutuations
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situations
 in the future from
occuring
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occurring
 to a certain degree. In conclusion,
Although
people
 should not act pursuant to
traditions
, it is necessary to keep
the
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past events in mind for the best future by having days of memory and maintaining the connection with previous generations.
However
,
this
 social
insitution
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institution
 should not be used as
social
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 regulator since it impairs
further
 development.
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  • heritage
  • continuity
  • progress
  • innovative
  • cultures
  • societal advances
  • integration
  • cultural tapestry
  • ideologies
  • reconciled
  • evolved
  • adapted
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