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Traffic congestion is becoming increasigly problematic in major cities. What solution can you suggest to help solve the problem.

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Nowadays, being rich and famous become the standard basis of a
person
's worth and social status, neglecting the fact that the true value of the individual is having
a
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good manners and right conduct. I strongly disagree with
this
 notion as
the
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people's right
attitude
 should be the mere basis of their own worth. Old-fashioned values
such
 as
hounor
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honour
, kindness and trust play a vital role in determining individual worth. These are the traits that will measure
on
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how
success
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 and valuable they are in
the
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society. Without
these good
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this good attitude
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attitude
, they won't be able to prove their worth as a
person
.
For instance
, a politician, despite
of
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being wealthy and well-known,
he
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might not
casts
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 the votes of the majority of the voters if he doesn't have a good
attitude
 towards the community.
Thus
, being kind and trustworthy symbolize the true value of a
person
 and not the amount of money and material
possesions
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possessions
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 they have.
Moreover
, good
old-fasioned
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old-fashioned
 traits are
highly
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 recognized than any other kind of wealth. Being
kind
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, trustworthy and caring
person
 has a more impact
in
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 touching other people's
live
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.
For example
, a Doctor in a rural area who look after the sick without expecting anything in return is more appreciated and valued by
the
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society.
Thus
, having good personal traits are more valuable than being rich. In conclusion,
although
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enourmous
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enormous
 amount of material
possesion
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possession
possessions
 and being socially well-known are vital to
measure
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individuals
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 worth, in my opinion, it is the right
attitude
 that really matters and
highly
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 more important.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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