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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts present the proportion of men and women who perform various household chores in a particular country. It
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 shows how much
time
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 is allotted to each
task
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 by both sexes.
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, it is evident that a large majority of the male and female population are mainly involved in cooking and spend most of their
time
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 on
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task
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 on a daily basis. About 60% of men do the cooking and usually take an hour of their
time
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 on
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task
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 every day. Cleaning came in second when 40% of
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 gender dedicated a good 45
minutes
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 to accomplish it. Approximately 20% of males
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 take the
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 to care for their pets and do some house repairs as they allotted roughly 20
minutes
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 and 5
minutes
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 for these activities, respectively.
On the other hand
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, 80% of the population who cooks at home are women and they usually spend more than 80
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 per day on
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 specific
task
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.
While
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 roughly 60% of females do the cleaning for more than an hour, 20% of them still managed to pamper their pets for at least 20
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. Some women, despite how few in number, are even able to save a tidbit of their
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 doing house repairs. In conclusion, among all tasks, individuals from both genders spend most of their
time
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 preparing meals

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, task, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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