The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give
the
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information
of
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the percentage
in
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four typical
meals
of different types of nutrients. Dinner
account
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accounts
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for the biggest part
in
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the intake of sodium, with a
proportion
of 43%. Breakfast and
snacks
have
similar
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pattern
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in
this
kind of nutrient, as both are 14%. Lunch makes the rest the part of the whole typical
meals
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meal
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.
Also
, with a percentage of 37%, the largest part of saturated fat
intaking
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happens in dinner, but not far more than the
proportion
of lunch and
snacks
, which are 21% and 26% respectively.
However
, added
suger
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sugar
shows
an
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different pattern in the
meals
--42% in
snacks
, which
far
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more than the
proportion
of other kinds of
meals
. Meanwhile, the percentage of other
meals
are relatively close to each other. In summary, people eat the most added sugar in their
snacks
, and saturated fat is relatively average in different
kind
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kinds
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of
meals
.
Moreover
, dinner is obviously the most important meal as it has the biggest or
second-beiggest
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second-biggest
proportion
of all kinds of
the
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nutrients.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words meals, proportion, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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