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Some people think that cooking food at home is a waste of time. They think that fast food restaurants have made our life easier and less stressful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Almost all
people
 prefer fast
food
 to
home
food
. Some have argued that nowadays, fast
food
 restaurants are becoming more and more popular fast
food
 in
every day
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 life
instead
 of self-made
food
 and they think that cooking at
home
 is waste of time. From my
perspective
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i
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I
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 disagree
this
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 proposal.
This
 essay will
demostrate
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demonstrate
 why its
prponents
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proponents
 are correct. On the one hand, fast
food
 can make do not have to spend time preparing
food
 after a long day of study or work.
Howewer
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However
 on closer examination,
people
 who eat outside can usually experience health problems that bother them in the future.
For instance
,
home
 cooking allows
people
 to control all the ingredients they use and
therefore
, they are able to prepare h, it can
beealth
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breath
beneath
food
.
On the other hand
, to the above benefits of cooking, we must ignore the fact that cooking can
also
 become one of our favourite activities to relieve stress. During cooking,
people
 can stay away from the hustle and bustle during the day and focus on cooking. Cooking
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 be a kind of meditation and allow
people
 to relax.
In
addition
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people
 can gain a sense of satisfaction after preparing delicious dishes that will cheer them up.
To conclude
,
considerring
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considering
 the aforementioned points, it can be inferred that despite the
fast
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fact
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 that some
people
 prefer fast
food
instead
 of cooking at
home
, which is more
convinent
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convenient
, I still think that
people
 should spend time preparing
food
 because
its
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 many benefits.
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