In many cities, many people are living in large apartment blocks. Does this accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages?

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I acknowledge that large buildings have several advantages I believe that there are more drawbacks as well.
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big
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are more convenient to their lifestyle.
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corporate management of
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people
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letters or packages.
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, many single families or workers are more likely suitable for the apartment because
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the administrator can handle a variety of resident's issues.
Furthermore
, another benefit of dwelling in the big flats is having
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access to the shared facilities
such
as a gym, swimming pool and karaoke.
Although
living in
skyscrapers
offers some conveniences and benefits, there are many disadvantages that
people
have to confront in
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large
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of flats.
To begin
with,
people
have limited renovation by living in a small space.
People
just need to live with less furniture and appliances
otherwise
their space may be crammed.
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close residence with other
people
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and privacy risks.
For example
, if the upstairs neighbour has kids they might make a lot of noise, by having puppies of the neighbour
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people
are more likely to be disturbed as well.
In addition
, when
people
can clearly hear other residents
as well as
they can hear you, it is a significant risk to
people
's privacy. In conclusion, living in
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both advantages and downsides
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a variety of
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. I personally agree that the drawbacks are more than the benefits.
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