the diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevnt.
The figures illustrate the lifespan of fast flowing
salmon
, which is the
one kind of big fish.
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Overall
, salmon
's life cycle has three main stages. It begins in the upper river
, then
lower
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the lower
river
and finally
open
sea. they live ten years during those stages.
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the open
Salmon
eggs are located in the upper river
below reeds and beside small stones. The salmon
babies, which are called fry, have to live there five
to six months and their length is going to be 3-8 cm. After that, when they grow up about 12 to 15 cm and become smolt, they go Change preposition
for five
to
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too
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a
river
and spend four years of their life on that.
Adult salmon
with Add an article
a length
the length
length
of 70 to 76 cm, live the Fix the agreement mistake
lengths
last
five of their lives in open
sea. Add an article
the open
Finally
, adult salmon
go to the upper river
to put their eggs in the bottom of the reeds.Submitted by shahab_e2020 on
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