the diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevnt.

the diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevnt.
The figures illustrate the lifespan of
salmon
, which is
the
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one kind of big fish.
Overall
,
salmon
's life cycle has three main stages. It begins in the upper
river
,
then
lower
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river
and
finally
open
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sea. they live ten years during those stages.
Salmon
eggs are located in the upper
river
below reeds and beside small stones. The
salmon
babies, which are called fry, have to live there
five
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to six months and their length is going to be 3-8 cm. After that, when they grow up about 12 to 15 cm and become smolt, they go
to
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fast flowing
river
and spend four years of their life on that. Adult
salmon
with
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a length
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length
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of 70 to 76 cm, live the
last
five of their lives in
open
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sea.
Finally
, adult
salmon
go to the upper
river
to put their eggs in the bottom of the reeds.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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