The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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depict

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the normal

household

spending

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Japan

Malaysia

in the year 2010

Overall

Japan

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Japan's

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chart clearly shows that

have

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half

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of their total

house

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housing

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expenditures were made by housing and other goods and services

where

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Malaysia

the highest proportion is housing

Malaysia

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Malaysia's

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slowest percentages of

household

spending our healthcare and transport with 30% and 10% respectively

where as

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Japan

these ratios exactly double 6% for housing and 20% for transport

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the remaining three types

healthcare

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of healthcare

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and food and other goods and services were approximately the same in each country except for healthcare it took

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first place in

Malaysia

for spendings

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34%

however

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percentage drops by 13% in

Japan

achieving 21% of total

household

expenses

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taken the third place.

To sum up

we could say that relevantly three types of

household

expenditure were relatively same in both countries which are food and other goods and services and housing

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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161 words

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"writing_prompt":"Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?",

. In modern times, children are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?