You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, •give details of your course and your arrival/departure date • explain your accommodation needs • ask for information about getting to and from the college

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Dear Sir My name is Prabhsimranjot kaur. I am starting

computer

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course in May. I have to go

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river college for

training

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the training

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course. I am writing to inform you that

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am coming to Winnipeg for 2 months. My training starts

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in June

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and ends in August. I need accommodation for 2 months and could you please help me to find out

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apartment or basement near to

college

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. I just need accommodation where good

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internet

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condition

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. Could you

also

find accommodation where good bus services so that

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can easily go to college and come back

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I look forward to your rapid response. best regards, Prabhsimranjot

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

110 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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