The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.
This
line chart demonstrates the
employment
trends in the USA presented through a
million
figure.
Overall
, the
trend
of manufacturing widely fluctuates
on the other hand
There is a positive
trend
of
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services and
agriculture
,
in contrast
to that in
agriculture
.The highest number of
employment
belonged to
agriculture
with 80
million
employment
while
the other two at approximately ten
million
In contrast
to the positive
trend
of manufacturing and services in the first four years period. the number of
agriculture
employment
dropped significantly and get surpassed by services at roughly 40
million
,There is
also
a reverse of the manufacturing
trend
in the same years After the intersection occurred all types of jobs stay on the same
trend
and there is a prediction that the
trend
will continue for over 43years.
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