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Production of carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases has a heating effect on the atmosphere and results in global warming. Why global warming is considered one of the most serious issues nowadays? How can this problem be solved?

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temperature
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rising
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, species and
environment
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the environment
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 could be affected.
This
 could lead to a
threaten
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for
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human
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a human
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being
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beings
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.
Hence
,
people
 were supposed to make some
changes
 in their life to solve the severe problem. Global warming was a serious issue because it posed a
threaten
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 to
human
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humans
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. When
tempeture
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temperature
temperatures
 got higher
then
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 before, some animals and plants which could not adapt
the
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 change would extinct.
This
 would reduce the sources of natural nutrition which
people
 needed to maintain their health.
Furthermore
, global warming caused the rising sea level,
it
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 would cut down the area where
people
 could live.
Therefore
, it was a must for
people
 to make some
changes
 to solve global warming.
People
 could change some daily habits to help improve global warming. Since it was mainly caused by
carbon
 dioxide,
people
 needed to decrease the
amount
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 of
carbon
 emissions. Purchase the
products
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of products
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 with simple packaging could decline
carbon
 emissions during waste disposal. Choose items which were sold near to their
origin produced
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origin-produced
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 place could reduce
carbon
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their carbon
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 footprint. Travel by public transportation helped lessen
carbon
 dioxide.
Although
 these were small
changes
 for one person,
it
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they
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 might become a significant influence when more and more
people
 joined. When global warming
get
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 worse, some species would disappear and lands would become smaller, both of these caused negative impacts on humans.
However
,
people
 could improve global warming by making little
changes
of
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in
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 their habits, like paying more attention to
production
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the production
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 of items and taking public transportation when going out. The most important thing is that the more
people
 make their effort to cut down the
amount
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 of
carbon
 emissions, the more improvement we could see in global warming.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • greenhouse gases
  • atmospheric heating
  • global warming
  • extreme weather events
  • rising sea levels
  • ecosystem disruption
  • heatwaves
  • droughts
  • species extinction
  • economic implications
  • disaster relief
  • tipping points
  • renewable energy
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon sequestration
  • reforestation
  • afforestation
  • sustainable agriculture
  • methane
  • nitrous oxide
  • international agreements
  • Paris Agreement
  • emissions reduction
  • lifestyle changes
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