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The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.

The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.
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The assigned circular chart expounds
the
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information about the three fast-food categories and
shoes
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shows
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how
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and how
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 much youngsters
are
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liked
this outlets items
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this outlets item
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 in Vietnam and Indonesia
in
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between 2017 and 2027.
Overall
,
it is clear that
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McDonald's
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McDonald is
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McDonald's
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most
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a most
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 popular outlet in both countries
upto
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up to
future
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the future
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 year
also
.
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, other outlets had different proportion trends that are liked
fluctuating
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. To commence with, it is clear from
details
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 that in Vietnam, Burger King had
highest
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 proportion in 2017 ,about
of
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52%,having a downfall of 13% in upcoming years. In the contrast, kfc had
lowest
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the lowest
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 ratio of popularity in 2017(4.1%).
Which
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 is projected that it will
rised
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rise
raised
around
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of
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2% in the future. Probing
further
, in Indonesia, the fraction was noticed at 23% in the beginning year, which is KFC but it is predicted as, the ratio will be inclined
upto
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up to
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 2027 and 15% was
percentage
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the percentage
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 of Burger King,where
fraction
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the fraction
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 goes downward about
of
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one-third.
In addition
, teenagers are preferred to eat
McDonald
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McDonald's
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 items more as compared to other outlets.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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