The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.

The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.
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information about the three fast-food categories and
shoes
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how
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and how
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much youngsters
are
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liked
this outlets items
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in Vietnam and Indonesia
in
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between 2017 and 2027.
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,
it is clear that
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McDonald's
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McDonald is
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McDonald's
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most
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a most
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popular outlet in both countries
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up to
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year
also
.
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, other outlets had different proportion trends that are liked
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. To commence with, it is clear from
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that in Vietnam, Burger King had
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proportion in 2017 ,about
of
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52%,having a downfall of 13% in upcoming years. In the contrast, kfc had
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ratio of popularity in 2017(4.1%).
Which
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is projected that it will
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rise
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around
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of
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2% in the future. Probing
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, in Indonesia, the fraction was noticed at 23% in the beginning year, which is KFC but it is predicted as, the ratio will be inclined
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2027 and 15% was
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the percentage
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of Burger King,where
fraction
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goes downward about
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one-third.
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, teenagers are preferred to eat
McDonald
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items more as compared to other outlets.
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