The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.

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information about the three fast-food categories and

shoes

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how

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much youngsters

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in Vietnam and Indonesia

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between 2017 and 2027.

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most

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popular outlet in both countries

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, other outlets had different proportion trends that are liked

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that in Vietnam, Burger King had

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proportion in 2017 ,about

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52%,having a downfall of 13% in upcoming years. In the contrast, kfc had

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ratio of popularity in 2017(4.1%).

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is projected that it will

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2% in the future. Probing

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, in Indonesia, the fraction was noticed at 23% in the beginning year, which is KFC but it is predicted as, the ratio will be inclined

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2027 and 15% was

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of Burger King,where

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goes downward about

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one-third.

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, teenagers are preferred to eat

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items more as compared to other outlets.

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The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.

Children who are brought up in a family that does not have a lot of money are better prepared to deal with problems when they become adults than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. Do agree or disagree with the statement.

Too much emphasis is given for education of the young. More government money should be spent to free time activity of young people. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.