The line graph gives the percentage of tourist`s visits for England art galleries,pavilions,piers and festivals in Brighton.

The line graph gives the percentage of tourist`s visits for England art galleries,pavilions,piers and festivals in Brighton.
The line graph gives the percentage of
tourist`s
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tourists'
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visits
for
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England
art
galleries,pavilions,piers and festivals in Brighton.
Overall
,it shows a general steadiness until a sudden plateau in
pavilion
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the pavilion
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and
art
gallery
in the
last
years. Both pier and festival remained stable trend along the period.
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of
art
gallery
and
pavilion
tended to go up,
although
they were
abrupt
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levelling out in both.By 1995
pavilion
attraction had reached its highest peak
for
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50% and
art
gallery
in 1985 for
fourty
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forty
four
percent
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.
Then
they showed remarkable steadiness despite touring to
art
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an art
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gallery
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galleries
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gradually
decreased
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in 2010 .
In contrast
,
art
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the art
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gallery
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galleries
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commenced
its
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their
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steadiness in 1990 and
pavilion
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the pavilion
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in 2000 with the rate of
art
gallery
visits being generally higher. The
proportin
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proportion
of
festival
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the festival
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was loftier than
pier
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the pier
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.In spite of that,
pier
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the pier
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had slight fluctuations over the period and significantly soared to twenty
percent
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per cent
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in 2010. Meanwhile,
festival`s
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the festival`s
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tendency stayed on
stayed on
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static.
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