The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.

The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.
This
flow graph shows the procedure to shape the
glass
containers.
Overall
, the whole flow includes nine steps in total, starting at the stage of the
glass
melting and the final step is to sort the good
glass
and pack it.
Firstly
, the
glass
should be put into the fire oven with 105-celsius heating.
Then
, the hot
glass
in mould 1 would be pressed and shaped to be a container which has a thick wall in
the
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mould 2. Followed by the steps mentioned, some air must be blown into
this
thick container. Turning to the next two important steps,
it
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focus
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on heating and cooling. The
glass
needs
a
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second-time heating at a high Celsus in the
kilin
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kiln
killing
space, with over 480 Celsus.
Next,
turn the temperature down to 25 Celsus with the purpose to cool it for one hour. The eighth step is to check the quality of the finished
glass
one by one in person. The final stage is to divide the
glass
into good and bad types, packing the good and throwing the bad to
waste
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box.
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