Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

While
some
people
think that dangerous
sports
should be banned by
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
, others think that
everyone
should have
freedom
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the freedom
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to do any
sports
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sport
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or activity. My take on
this
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is that freedom is the most important thing that
everyone
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of us
have
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, and
people
should make a decision on their own, to do dangerous
sports
or not. The first point is that
everyone
has their own passions, and
have
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a right to do anything he wants, until it becomes dangerous to others. As we know, there
are
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an awful lot of different dangerous
kind
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kinds
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of
sports
, which are presented
on
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at
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Olympic
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the Olympic
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games.
For instance
, freestyle skiing is one of the most spectacular
sports
, with lots of tournaments and
proffesionals
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professionals
in it. So why we should prevent
people
from doing it, if it's their passion, and they do it for living
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The other point is that
such
kinds
of
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can be harmful not only for
people
who do it
,
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but
also
for
people
who are just close to the place of action.
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there are a lot of street skaters, who are doing tricks in public places,
where
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there
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are lots of cars and pedestrians.
By
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the
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fact, they can do damage to them by accident. The problem is quite
whide-spread
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wide-spread
and can be solved just by providing them
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place to do their activity, where they can't be dangerous to other. To sum it up, I don't think that it's
a
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right decision just to put a ban on dangerous
sports
, because it is a big opportunity
to
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for
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everyone
to try
themselfs
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themselves
in a
proffesional
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professional
sport, and
also
it can be a great hobby
to
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for
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everyone
. But the main point is that
,
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it should be safe for others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • severe injuries
  • fatalities
  • base jumping
  • bull running
  • extreme skiing
  • safeguard
  • well-being
  • regulating
  • avoidable harm
  • healthcare costs
  • burdening
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • training
  • equipment
  • mitigated
  • personal satisfaction
  • mental health benefits
  • resilience
  • adventure
  • assess risks
  • public safety
  • unnecessary healthcare costs
  • outright bans
  • balanced approach
  • stringent safety standards
  • mandatory training sessions
  • adequately informed
  • safeguarding
  • public health
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