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In some areas of world people love to live in traditional lifestyle while in other regions they have a modern living standard. Why it happens? Discuss both views for supporting of your topic.

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As a result
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 of the impact of technology on our lives, we are shifting to a modern lifestyle.
On the other hand
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, a part of the population is rejecting
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 change and is anchored to the tradition. In the essay, I will try to give some examples and
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 discuss the reason for the origin of
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 phenomenon. Commercial metropolia and cities with high tourism are places where the modern lifestyle is very common. The factors that are causing
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 transformation in the behaviour are the contact with imported traditions and the advance in technology. People are continuously exposed to new stimuli that can have a huge impact on the way they live. Traditions,
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, are more likely to remain in rural areas or underdeveloped cities where is rare to spot visitors.
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 the fact
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 uncommon to mix their costumes with those of other cultures. Italy offers a good example of
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 trend. The north of the country, especially the big cities like Milan,
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 slowly living in a more globalized manner. The south,
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 the small towns, is still very attached to the tradition. In my opinion,
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traditions are fascinating and we must preserve them but
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 doesn't mean that we should avoid
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cultural exchange at all costs. In fact, we could benefit from contact with other costumes.
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