World would be a better place if more women were in leadership positions . To what extent you agree or disagree .

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The balance between male and female leaders have slightly improved but

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men tend to be boss in many companies. Some believe that more

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in leadership positions would make the world a better place and I support

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opinion in order to widen perspectives in every way. On the one hand, many rules in a variety of companies including hospitals have been decided based on the previous work environment, which means that some lifestyle changes

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as maternity leaves were not fully considered.

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, a female doctor, who returned from her maternity leave, has to face the fact that her career is no longer the same as her coworkers, who will have successful careers in the future. Because there is no precedent in

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hospital to support her.

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, someone who can see things from

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's perspectives should create new functions to adjust to the current situations.

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, the

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succeeding in their

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would not get better.

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, some male workers do not prefer to work with a superior female worker. One reason may be related to

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syndrome.

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condition affects emotions somewhat and it leads to an emotional attitude and

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working.

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men do not suffer from

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syndrome and are more stable in terms of mental condition.

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men tend to think logically,

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pay attention to feelings in a positive way. In

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case,

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could be more reliable and supportive when they need to take care of the companies.

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the criteria to become the top has not changed, I believe that female bosses should be selected to break the old rules.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

280 words

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World would be a better place if more women were in leadership positions . To what extent you agree or disagree .

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled. ​ Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples.​

Some people think that one should plan detailed activities for their leisure time, while others disagree with this view. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own

Many people argue that smoking should be banned due to its harmful effects on human health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled.   Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples.