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The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts
illustrates
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suggestings
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 for global generating by field between 2024 and 2060.
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, the two charts give information about manufacturings and
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, it is compared between two
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years
.
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,
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services
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 and manufacturing are
main
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 fields each year.
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, the info-com tech ,
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agriculture and an energy
areas
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 approximately has been
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 number.
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, in 2040 , the
services
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main
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 field and the percentage is a fifth,
in addition
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, the
manufactoring
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manufacturing
 is
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 level in
a
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 chart and
number
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 is 31%.
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, info-com Tech is third so that rate
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%.
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agriculture , energy and materials have just about
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 interest that
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 4%,7% and 3% respectively.
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, in 2060 the
services
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 and manufacturing
rate
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 are 41% and 33% respectively.
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,
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 tech portion will be 16% but the
services
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, energy and materials
rate
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 are just under a tenth.
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 the
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 each chart shows
services
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 and
manufacuring
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manufacturing
 do not
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 important but
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technological development ought to impact that situation.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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