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Some people believe that touristsdo not learn anything during their holidays, while others believe that they learn a lot. Discuss both sides .

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social
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 concerns today
relate
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tourist
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 holidays.
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 it is widely believed that
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toruist
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tourist
tourists
 do not learn anything during their holidays, other believe
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toruist
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tourist
tourists
 can learn a lot of
thing
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 during their holidays. On the one hand, it is
agrued
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argued
agreed
 that by some that
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toruist
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tourist
tourists
 do not learn anything during their
holiday
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. The main reason is that some
people
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 just focus on
the
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enjoyment only
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 they are
in
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 vocation, they don't want to learn anything
durng
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during
 fun time is dependent on their friends and their interest with no one can't ruin the
holiday
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.
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toruist
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tourist
tourists
want
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 go around the places they arrive that places and finish their plans on vacation
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, it is strongly believed by others that
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tourist
tourists
 can learn a lot of
thing
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things
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 during their
holiday
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.
People
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 often have
this
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 opinion because they want to explore new things and their experiments with the place, they want to learn about the
historical
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, landscape sites they want to
gaining
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 more
experiment
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 in
their
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 places they have arrived. A particularly good
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axample
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 here is before they
going
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 anywhere, they will research
regarding
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local languages,
nature
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 of
people
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, living cultures , food and many things in that place because they want to know something new
for
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 that place when
we
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 arrived In conclusion, some
group
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 of
people
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 want to enjoy their
holiday
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, some
people
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 like to learn more experiences to help them in life. Personally,
i
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 tend to believe that we should learn with enjoy
in
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the
holiday
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