Some people think they have the right to use as much fresh water as they want, but others believe government should control the use of freshwater as it is a limited resource. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is believed by some people that people should be free with respect to reaching freshwater
sources
while
others assert that these
sources
should be in control by
government
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due to
their limits. Freedom
in
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accessing freshwater may be beneficial for individuals’
health
. Looking
to
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this
case from the other side,
water
sources
are not limitless and it may lead to draughts in some regions. On the one hand, freedom in
accessibility
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the accessibility
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of fresh
water
may increase societies’
health
quality. Many populated regions have been suffering
due to
use
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the use
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of
water
limitations and
this
action would change their status. They can
use
fresh
water
in drink, washing foods and showering and they have given up consuming bottled
waters
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water
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to maintain their
health
and
thus
, they can preserve their money.
Additionally
, they may
use
water
in their gardens to obtain more healthy groceries and fruits.
Hence
, they would get some profits in terms of
health
and funds.
On the other hand
,
government
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the government
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ought to control in
distributing
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distribution
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of freshwater
sources
due to
their limited amount.
Although
some restrictions have happened in terms of using
of
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water
supplies and they seem not fair for consumers, these actions would bring some profit in sustainability
accessing
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in long term.
For example
, without these restrictions, some people may
use
sources
unnecessarily and
government
may not distribute supplies in critical durations
such
as springs and summers.
In addition
, limitless distribution may damage
water
infrastructures and
likelihood
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the likelihood
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of
water
cuts may increase.
Therefore
,
ruling
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the ruling
a ruling
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of
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on
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these
sources
may be beneficial for permanent
use
. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied with
this
discussion. Even though
,
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free
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the free
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using these
sources
have some considerable positive impact
for
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individuals’ situations, in my opinion,
sources
should be managed by
government
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the government
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owing to
its
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their
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long term
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long-term
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