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Band 3.5

Many people choose to learn practical subjects therefore theoretical subjects will be no longer be taught in university. Do you agree or disagree?

Universities will not teach conceptual
course
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 any more, individual select experimental texts.
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 some might agree with
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 statement;
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, I completely disagree. Not only because in
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 without knowledge,
practical
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 is impossible and in the cutting-edge
of
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technology companies hire
skillful
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 graduates who can write and read but
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 because
learn
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 theory
play
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 an important role to manage machines. There are multiple benefits of
theoretic
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 courses,
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, one must be knowledgeable to do any experimental work.
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idea
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 it is impossible to complete any task. Take an example of a doctor, he cannot do
operation
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of
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 a patient without knowing the disease.
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, conceptualization is crucial for everyone.
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, in
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 modern age of science, study theory
prepare
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 one for the competition in the job market because multinational businesses prefer to hire universities fresh
graduated
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 people and those who have experience but
not
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 graduated from university are not able to compete with those who have both knowledge and experience. As Companies want their employees well educated
who
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 are good communicators and expressers. Take
an
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 example of Honda Company, the
cars
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 selling percentage is almost 85
percent
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 and people prefer to buy or fix their cars with their staff
,
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 because they are
expert
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 and educated.
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, conceptualization
also
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need
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in
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job opportunities.
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,
theory
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the theory
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 has profound benefits to supervise engines
,
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 and different
kind
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 of
gadget
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gadgets
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. To
sum-up
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, I believe analytical programs have beneficial to accomplish any experimental activity,
get
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 a good job and
handle
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handling
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mechanism
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mechanisms
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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