The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
This
bar chart depicts the figure between girls and
boy
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boys
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in school education for 3 different levels. It is clear from the graph that, all of the levels
seems
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nearly
of
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apply
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the number in 1990 and 1998.
According to
what is shown,
in
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at
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the primary level all the students their
ratio
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a ratio
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not
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under 80. But in the next level some of them their number is between 72 to 99
that
is represents
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deference largely. in the end the
last
level it
is fluctuate
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from 60 to 80,
then
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and then
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grades went up to the target.
To sum up
, we could say that all three grades of education school made
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a different
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different
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in students’
number
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numbers
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. But all of them
up
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are up
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60
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to 60
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.
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