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The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last 40 years. Summarise the information below by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last 40 years. Summarise the information below by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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rainfall
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 for
Australia
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last
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year
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 by month and the average
rainfall
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 in
Australia
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 for the past
forty
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years
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.
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, it can be seen that
average
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rainfall
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 for
Australia
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last
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year
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 was a little lower than
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rainfall
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 in
Australia
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 for the past
forty
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years
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, but generally followed the same pattern. The average
rainfall
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 of the
last
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forty
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years
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 in
Australia
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 decreased from a peak at the beginning of the
year
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 to lows in the months in the middle of the
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. Towards the end of the
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year
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rainfall
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 rose again.
Rainfall
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 data for
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year
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 generally followed the same trend as the
last
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forty
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years
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' average.
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 the general pattern of the two sets of data
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 similar, there are some differences. The line representing the accumulation of the average
rainfall
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 from the past
forty
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years
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 begins at around eighty
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 in January and
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 drops sharply to around thirty
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 in April.
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then
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 drops slowly to around thirteen
milimetres
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millimetres
 in September and
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 rises again steadily to just under sixty
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 in December. Average
rainfall
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 for the
last
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year
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 was a little lower than the
forty
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year
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 average for most months,
excepting
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 March, May, June and November when the
rainfall
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 was a little heavier. August and October were particularly dry when compared with the
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year
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 average, at around five
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 each compared with about fifteen and twenty
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 each respectively for the
forty
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year
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 average.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, australia, year, forty, years, millimetres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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