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The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts provide information on the proportion of males and females in
employment
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 in 6 broad categories, divided into manual and non-manual
occupations
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. In general, a greater
percentage
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 of
women
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work
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 in non-manual
occupations
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 than
work
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 in manual
occupations
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, and the reverse is true for
men
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. In the non-manual
occupations
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,
while
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 a greater
percentage
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 of working
women
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 than
men
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 are found in clerical-type positions, there is a smaller
percentage
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 of
women
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 than
men
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 employed in managerial and professional positions. The
percentage
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 of
women
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 employed in other non-manual
occupations
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 is slightly larger than the
percentage
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 of
men
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 in these
occupations
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. In manual
employment
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, the biggest difference between the two sexes is in the
employment
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 of craft workers, where males make up 24% of the workforce and females just 3%.
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, the
percentage
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 of
women
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 working as general
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labourers is very small, only 1%. There is not a great deal of difference between the
percentage
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 of
men
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 doing other forms of manual
work
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 (26%) and
women
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 in other manual
work
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 (27%). In summary, the two charts clearly show that
women
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 do not have the same access as
men
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 to certain types of
employment
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, occupations, percentage, women, work, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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