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QUESTIONS: WITH A FAST PACE OF MODERN LIFE MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE TURNING TOWARDS FASTFOOD FOR THEIR MAIN MEALS. DO YOU THINK ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE ADVANTAGES?

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this
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 advanced
era
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 a number of people prefer to eat outside rather than at
home
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.There
some
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are some
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 benefits but the drawbacks outweigh the advantages. There we
are discuss
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this
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 factor in upcoming
pharagraphs
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paragraphs
. First of all, folks eat
fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
 which
save
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saves
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 their cooking time so, they spend that time
in
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on
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 other work.
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, restaurant supply unhealthy meals which
contains
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contain
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 excess oil,
sugar
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and sugar
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as well as
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 use old
food
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.
Addionally
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, unhealthy
proccessed
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processed
food
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 leads to health
disease
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diseases
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for
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,for
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 instance,obesity
for
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in
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long
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the long
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 term, heart attack, liver failure
as
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 many other problems.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
hotel
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hotels
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 use plastic
papers
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paper
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,
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and bag
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bag
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bags
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 for packaging
food
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this
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which
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 makes
food
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 unhealthy
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 spread pollution in
environment
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the environment
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 with plastic bags.
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,
fastfood
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fast food
 is more expansive as
compare
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 to
home
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food
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 and it is
small
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a small
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 portion of
food
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 in
large
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a large
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amount
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amounts
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 of
bill
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bills
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.
Hence
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,
food
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 is cooked at
home
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according to
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 our own taste and choice
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 cheap not only
this
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 it is
fresh
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freshly
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 cooked with
home
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ingridients
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ingredients
. With
this
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 people stay healthy
also
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 save money and protect
environment
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the environment
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.
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, there are some benefits to
eat
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fastfood
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fast food
 but
the
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apply
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more disadvantages. So, we should eat healthy
food
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 which
cooked
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is cooked
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 at
home
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 by
ourself
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ourselves
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 or
family
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our family
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 it helps us to live
long
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a long
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 healthy life
as well as
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 protect our environment from extra packaging material.
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