The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned 

future development of the site. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and 

make comparisons where relevant.
This
plan displays the comparison between
current
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the current
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industrial estate of
the
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Norbiton city and how it will
looks
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in the future.
Overall
, all of the recent factories will be demolished to be constructed for new
housings
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housing
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. The road extension plan
also
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noticeable on the northern and western
side
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.
Moreover
, there will be several facilities added
into
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the planned development as well. It can be seen that eight factories exist in the current industrial area.
Furthermore
, there is a river in the north and
a
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wide farmland across it. The road is longing from the east to the west and ended up an around about at the
center
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of the estate and
then
continue
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to the south. For the planned development, the industrial estate will be totally transformed into a housing residence and the factory buildings will no longer exist. There are seven housings will be built in the area.
Besides
, the construction of
school
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the school
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, playground, and medical centre will happen on the eastern
side
while
the shops will be built
in
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the western
side
opposite the medical centre. On the north
side
, the road will be extended and passes through the river.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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