The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001.

Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides data about the proportion of people from the Netherlands, France,
Sweden
, the UK, and Germany who took at least one sick day between 1992 and 2001.
Overall
, it can be seen that, during the analyzed time frame, only
Sweden
, and France's percentages of illness absences changed,
whereas
the other three countries remained quite unchanged. About those whose percentages changed, France experienced the greatest variation, being at 5% in the
first
two
years
, and
then
going constantly down until it
leveled
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off in 1997 and continued like that for the next 4
years
.
In contrast
,
Sweden
's fraction of workers who
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absenced
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absence
absences
rose
up
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by almost 2% from 1995 to 2001, as in the
first
4
years
it stayed quite stable.
On the other hand
, the UK and Germany remained approximately stable with just some slight fluctuations. The former started at around 2.5% and ended at roughly the same number and the latter at 1.5% ending still there.t variation, being at 5% in the
first
two
years
,
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and
then
going constantly down until it
leveled
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levelled
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off in 1997 and continued like that for the next 4
years
.
In contrast
,
Sweden
's fraction of workers who
Add a missing verb
were absenced
show examples
absenced
Correct your spelling
absence
absences
rose
up
Change preposition
apply
show examples
by almost 2% from 1995 to 2001, as in the
first
4
years
it stayed quite stable.
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