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Many people move abroad for job opportunities, but they have to live away from their families and friends Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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First of all, I would like to tell you about transportation prices, prices of transportation have increased. Especially, after COVID-19 air transportation prices have been increasing. Until a few years ago a lot of people have afforded to buy tickets and the community could easily travel to other countries. Nowadays, the population buy one-way tickets and a significant number of humans want to act in another
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job opportunity. People usually
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 to a developed
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 point, we have to talk about the benefits and negative affect of moving to another
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. From my point of view, I can say that there are tremendous benefits to
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. For İnstance, in undeveloped countries, students can not improve themselves because their education system is not enough for them. Some forward-thinking parents
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 to developed countries for their children's future. If they
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, they might learn a different language, may see another culture, and the most vital thing is they might have points of view with different views.
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. They may miss out spend time with their family, everything may not go the way they want. They may not be able to find the job they want. Perhaps, they might not get used to another culture. In conclusion, We can say that there are a lot of benefits and negative effects of the
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 abroad. In my opinion, every folk should visit another
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 at least once. If I had a child, Absolutely, I guide them to live developed
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; in education, and culture, and they may learn a different language
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 of speaking their native language. I hope my dreams will come to thru.
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