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he first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

he first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the percentage of
women
 and
men
 who do some
kinds
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kind
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 of housework and the amount of
time
 spent
in
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 each task per
day
 by each gender. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that most
women
 and
men
 do cooking and spend most of their
time
 doing it. First of all, 80% of females cook
during
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each
day
,
while
 60% of
men
 cooks. After that, 60% of ladies clean their houses.
On the other hand
, 40% of
men
 clean per
day
.
According to
 pet care,
same
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 percentage of
men
 and
women
, which is 20%, spend their
day
 with their pets.
Then
, the percentage of
men
 doing house repairs reached almost 20% which was significantly higher than
women
 by approximately 10%. By far, the average
time
of
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people doing housework is in
minutes
. Interestingly, more than 80
minutes
 were spent by
women
 cooking, but exactly 60
minutes
 were spent by
men
. Following that, the
time
 spent
in
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cleaning by females and males is 70 and 45
minutes
, respectively.
Next,
20
minutes
 were spent
to take
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 care of pets per
day
 by
women
 and
men
.
Lastly
, about 5
minutes
 were spent by
women
in
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 house repairs
otherwise
men
 spend more than 15
minutes
 doing repairs in
house
Correct article usage
the house
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, time, day, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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