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he first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

he first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the percentage of
women
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 and
men
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 who do some
kinds
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 of housework and the amount of
time
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 spent
in
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on
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 each task per
day
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 by each gender. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that most
women
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 and
men
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 do cooking and spend most of their
time
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 doing it. First of all, 80% of females cook
during
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each
day
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,
while
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 60% of
men
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 cooks. After that, 60% of ladies clean their houses.
On the other hand
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, 40% of
men
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 clean per
day
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.
According to
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 pet care,
same
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the same
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 percentage of
men
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 and
women
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, which is 20%, spend their
day
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 with their pets.
Then
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, the percentage of
men
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 doing house repairs reached almost 20% which was significantly higher than
women
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 by approximately 10%. By far, the average
time
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of
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people doing housework is in
minutes
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. Interestingly, more than 80
minutes
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 were spent by
women
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 cooking, but exactly 60
minutes
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 were spent by
men
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. Following that, the
time
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 spent
in
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cleaning by females and males is 70 and 45
minutes
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, respectively.
Next,
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20
minutes
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 were spent
to take
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 care of pets per
day
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 by
women
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 and
men
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.
Lastly
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, about 5
minutes
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 were spent by
women
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in
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on
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 house repairs
otherwise
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men
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 spend more than 15
minutes
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 doing repairs in
house
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the house
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, time, day, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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