Your child is going on a trip to a nature reserve organised by a local youth club. The club leader is looking for parents to travel with the group and you will like to go. Write a letter to the leader of the youth club. In your letter Say why you want to go on the trip Describe what you could do to help during the trip Ask for more details about the trip

Dear Mr Thomson, I am Harvey, living in apartment number 477 on Grand Avenue, London. I am writing to you with regards to showing my interest
to go
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on the
trip
which
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with
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children
on 7th April 2023. First of all, I came to know that the club leader searched for suitable parents who accompanied the
children
on the
trip
to a nature reserve. I find myself suitable for that opportunity because I
knew
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that area very well and I
had
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visited there various times and know the procedure very well. Moving on,
during
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that
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if I stay with the
children
also
enhance their knowledge by explaining to them about the nature reserve.
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that,
also
boost
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the confidence of students and playing some games with
children
becomes a memorizing movement for them.
Finally
, if you find me a suitable partner to manage that
trip
please provide some information about the
trip
like the total number of
children
, timing, how to commute and how many adults go with that group so that I can plan
accordingly
. Please let me know if you find any
further
information from me. My email ID is [email protected]. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Harvey
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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