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Writing Task 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, •explain why you changed jobs •describe your new job •tell him / her your other news

#minutes #work #company #friend #•explain #jobs #•describe #job #•tell #news
Hi Matt , I hope
this
 letter finds you well . Sorry for not writing to you before I've been so busy since I started working in a new company .
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 I got into a new company in London . I'm very excited to let you know and show you all the projects that I've been part of in my new role. I've been struggling with my
last
 work ,
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, the salary and they didn't allow me to put my ideas or creation in the newspaper that's why I decided to quit asap . I decided to work for a new company . Moda business is amazing , all the staff , location , and production are very organising and I know I would learn a lot ,
although
 the salary is not what I expected, they give me many different roles in each area
which
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 my skills grow. the most important news about Moda business is that I would be travelling
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 1 month to Australia for the first Cloth Festival . So I will see you my beauty . I am getting ready for
this
 travel because they will pay me for everything and I will be there for almost 2 weeks which it's great . Best regard, Paulo .
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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