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Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The diagrams depict the
features
 of the early mobile
phone
 and its contemporarily developed counterpart.
Overall
, phones were heavier and wider in the early eras than those developed much later.
Moreover
, the newer
phone
 has
features
in addition
 to those contained in its preceding model. Both models have certain commonalities and contrasting elements in their designs. Some of the shared
features
 of the two devices include a keyboard containing a number pad, a function select button
that is
 situated centrally right below the
phone
 screen, and the earphone which is located in the middle of the top-most horizontal section of the
phone
.
Although
 the newer version of the mobile has retained all of the aforementioned
features
 of the older type, there are visible differences too. Appearance-wise, the early mobile phones resemble a walkie-talkie
in contrast
 to their successive counterparts which are made flippable.
While
 the early designs had only black and white displays, the contemporary ones feature coloured displays on their screens. The new models are
also
 much more advanced, containing a camera with video capability
whereas
 the previous models lacked
this
 feature.
Lastly
, the functions offered by the device have witnessed the greatest progress as the function button is surrounded by more operational keys that offer facilities for e-mailing, playing music and multiplayer gaming.
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