IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The chart shows the change in forested land in different regions of the world over time.

The chart shows the change in forested land in different regions of the world over time.
#change #land #regions #world #time
A glance at the bar chart indicates the change
rate
 of covering forested land in terms of three different periods in ten countries.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 only five countries experienced an upward trend,
whereas
 the rest of
areas
Correct article usage
the areas
show examples
 showed a decline. It
also
 can be seen that the highest decreasing
rate
 covered
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
Central America
in contrast
 to
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
East Asia, the figures were at the peak over
this
 period of fifteen years. In terms of the increasing
rate
, the number of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
East Asia was the highest from 2000 to 2010 and 2005 to 2010, peaking at approximately 1.3% and 1.1% respectively,
while
 nearly 1% of
Caribbean
Correct article usage
the Caribbean
show examples
 was the highest before 2000. The lowest rising
rate
 in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
North America was an insignificant minority, even 0% in the first five
year
Change to a plural noun
years
show examples
 over
this
 period.
However
, with regards to the decreasing proportion,
Central
Correct article usage
the Central
show examples
America
Replace the word
American
show examples
 area fell by exactly 1.5%, around 1.1% and 1.2% over three periods respectively.
By contrast
, the figure for North Africa and
south
Change the capitalization
South
show examples
 Asia shared a similar trend,
fell
Wrong verb form
falling
show examples
 by roughly 0.7% and 0.8% each.
Submitted by zjlslqls on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • reforestation
  • sustainable practices
  • conservation policies
  • biodiversity
  • socioeconomic factors
  • agricultural expansion
  • logging
  • urban development
  • global impact
  • climate change
  • forest management
  • baseline comparison
  • environmental influences
  • political influences
What to do next:
Look at other essays: