Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by olher countres have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Globalisation has enabled
countries
around the
world
to trade with each other irrespective of the
distance
between them. Some people state that even most of the
goods
like basic commodities are usually transported from far away. I completely agree with their claim as it is factually recorded that the volume has
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increased in recent times.
This
essay will discuss the reasons why
this
phenomenon is factually correct and will provide an explanation in detail. Our planet inhabits diversity in cultures, languages, races and faiths around the
world
.
Likewise
, the topography across various regions of the
world
has distinct features. Some of the basic amenities like spices can only be cultivated in
the
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regions which
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specific weather conditions and distinct soil ingredients. Because of
this
, most
countries
end up trading
goods
from different parts of the
world
. Take pepper as an instance, it cannot be grown in Europe as it requires
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land and warm weather conditions.
Therefore
, the topographical diversity causes
countries
to trade with those who are physically at a far
distance
from them.
Furthermore
, it is often observed that
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majority of
countries
have hostile relations with their neighbouring
countries
due to
cultural rivalries or territorial disputes.
Due to
this
, they often restrict trading among themselves to prevent each other from progressing economically.
As a result
, they are forced to trade with
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countries
which are at a far
distance
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them. A good illustration of
this
is the fact that China purchases dry fruits from Brazil rather than India because of their unfriendly relations with their neighbour.
Consequently
,
countries
are prompted to buy
goods
from those states with whom they have allied
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and
also
with those who are far away from them.
To conclude
,
this
essay comprehensively illustrated why the phenomenon of
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distance
trading across
countries
for even
the
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basic
goods
has become prevalent
due to
globalisation. Diversity in
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habitat
as well as
the commonly observed hostile relations with neighbouring nations are major reasons leading to
this
development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global economy
  • International trade
  • Economies of scale
  • Carbon emissions
  • Supply chain disruptions
  • Geopolitical tensions
  • Quality control
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Consumer choice
  • Employment opportunities
  • Cost savings
  • Local production
  • Imported goods
  • Carbon footprint
  • Economic growth
  • Global market
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