Behaviour in school is getting worse .Explain the causes and the effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions

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this
time, young
people
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bevahiour
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behaviour
are
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getting worse in
school
. Here it is my thought and perspectives about
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issue and I will explain
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.
Nonetheless
, we all know that our
school
is the source of the young
age
to know more about life and cannot get it their own house or parents
such
as how they can learn about the meaning of education to our life, proper interactions to other
people
and what to do in near future. Simple homework to do their house and will explain
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to the next class,
this
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is the task
of
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our young
age
need to do and to know
of
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their educators what they need to teach
for
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the listener.
In addition
, there are many causes and effects
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behavioural
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of
young
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age
are
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changing and
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.
Firstly
, some of them are struggling
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bullying
with
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their seatmates inside the room
even
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and even
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in
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outside the building, they can't cope up how to face
this
issue and suddenly makes feel them alone and don't want to go to
school
and
partly
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of
them
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are became much worse than the bullier folks.
Secondly
,
in
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our generation
this
day are not like before old generation, they
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changing when it comes to social media and
the
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days of
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all
classess
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classes
are using
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the website
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website
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websites
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,
online
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and online
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class
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classes
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when lecturing their children and some of their
listener
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are
feel
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bored and faking of their teacher that they are listening, somehow they are doing something on social media. As
a
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results
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of
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this
situation right now are getting worse
to
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our community
such
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as
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young
age
are not anymore interested in
the
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education, they are young to have
a
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own family and
this
can lead to
adaptation
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of their future children and most serious effects too many
people
are being bad in our society became murderer, robbery and taking advantages to other
people
. The solution
for
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this
problems
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, we need to be aware what is the problem or
struggling
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of
your
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own children when going to
school
, talk to them nicely
be
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active
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listener and if you know the problem talk to
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concern
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persons
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in the
school
so you'll
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it out; how to solve
this
issue and most important thing to do conducting or giving free
educational
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to the
people
are not capable to study
due to
financial constraint. In conclusion, we need to open our eyes and mind to do a better plan
to
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our society so we can figure
what
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is the best way to solve and get
positive
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outcome
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to
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for
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other
people
. Be fair enough to all
people
and give them a chance to become
better
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a better
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person
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people
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.
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