The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.
The graph illustrates the information from a 2008 report about
energy
consumption
in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2023. There are six
energy
namely
Petrol
and
Oil
, Coal, Natural
gas
, Nuclear, Solar/wind, and
Hydropower
. The projection of
energy
consumption
from 1980 to 2030,
Petrol
and
Oil
, Coal, Nuclear, and Solar/wind will
increase
.
Petrol
and
Oil
will
increase
from 35 to 48
quadrillion
units
. Coal starts with 16 and will
increase
to 32 in 2030. Nuclear will slightly
increase
from 4 to 9. The
last
energy
consumption
that will
increase
is Solar from 4 to 8
quadrillion
units
. Natural
gas
and
Hydropower
projection in 2030 will be stagnant. In 1980 Natural
gas
will
increase
till 2015, starting with 20
quadrillion
units
, and will stop
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the increase
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in 2015 and stagnant from 2015 till 2030 at 25
quadrillion
units
.
Hydropower
Energy
in 1980 was 4
quadrillion
units
, and the trend is up and down till 2010, in 2015 till 2030 the number will be stuck at 4
quadrillion
units
.
To sum up
, the projection of
energy
consumption
in the USA for
Petrol
and
Oil
, Coal, Nuclear and Solar/wind will
be
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increase
. Natural
gas
and
Hydropower
will be stagnant.
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