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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.
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The graph illustrates the information from a 2008 report about
energy
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consumption
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 in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2023. There are six
energy
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 namely
Petrol
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 and
Oil
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, Coal, Natural
gas
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, Nuclear, Solar/wind, and
Hydropower
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. The projection of
energy
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consumption
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 from 1980 to 2030,
Petrol
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 and
Oil
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, Coal, Nuclear, and Solar/wind will
increase
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.
Petrol
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 and
Oil
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 will
increase
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 from 35 to 48
quadrillion
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units
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. Coal starts with 16 and will
increase
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 to 32 in 2030. Nuclear will slightly
increase
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 from 4 to 9. The
last
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energy
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consumption
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 that will
increase
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 is Solar from 4 to 8
quadrillion
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units
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. Natural
gas
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 and
Hydropower
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 projection in 2030 will be stagnant. In 1980 Natural
gas
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 will
increase
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 till 2015, starting with 20
quadrillion
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units
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, and will stop
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the increase
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increase
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 in 2015 and stagnant from 2015 till 2030 at 25
quadrillion
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units
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.
Hydropower
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Energy
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 in 1980 was 4
quadrillion
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units
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, and the trend is up and down till 2010, in 2015 till 2030 the number will be stuck at 4
quadrillion
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units
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.
To sum up
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, the projection of
energy
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consumption
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 in the USA for
Petrol
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 and
Oil
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, Coal, Nuclear and Solar/wind will
be
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increase
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. Natural
gas
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 and
Hydropower
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 will be stagnant.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption, petrol, oil, gas, hydropower, increase, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 8 times.
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