Some people think that the teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at schools. Others believe that teenagers should focus only on the subjects that they are best at or they are most interested in. To what extent do you agree?
There is no denying that education plays a pivotal role in the shaping future of adolescents. Some
people
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their
school
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the child's cognitive skills and Correct your spelling
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build
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builds
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the power
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instance
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in acadmic
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performance at Correct your spelling
academic
school
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people
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on their level of education. Children who have good marks have more Change the verb form
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opportunities
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univerities
.
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universities
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argue
that pupils should pay undivided attention Correct pronoun usage
who argue
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the subjects
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the child
a child
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a proffessional
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footballer he doesn't need to waste the time on Correct your spelling
professional
other subject
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another subject
other subjects
such
as math and biology.
I strongly dissagree
with Correct your spelling
disagree
this
opinion, because the subject at school
help
children to explore more Change the verb form
helps
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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school
.
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