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Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job.

#schools #time #subjects #history #people #skills #students #job
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It has been observed that centres of learning are spending lots of time educating history and other subjects,
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 others argued that schools should teach other working
skills
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 which help them in their job. I agree with
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 statement to a large extent. My inclination is discussed in the upcoming paragraphs with valid reasons and appropriate examples. The first argument put forward for stance is that learning working
skills
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 is beneficial for learners' careers and future aspects. Schools should teach practical lectures to the students, which helps them to increase their knowledge. By gaining better knowledge they can get better job opportunities from which students are able to join big companies. Because of
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, they can get a good package, which not only makes them financially strong but
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 fulfils their materialistic necessity.
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, communication
skills
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 play a vital role in jobs. Giving an interview, individuals should have good communication
skills
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. So teachers should teach
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 a skill in school.
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, centres can organize a debate competition, which helps them to increase their confidence to communicate with others.
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, it is not overlooked that, history plays an important role. Learners must teach these subjects in schools. They can come to know how our freedom fighters fought and were martyrs for the country. Apart from that, they can
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 learn how our ancestors lived at that time and
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 can learn from the past that consequences faced, so will never repeat in recent times or
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, it has been eventually commented that
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, history plays a vital role and helps to know more about the
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, other working
skills
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 are
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 very important for a job prospect.
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