I need nothing more than to drain my energy so that I can release the pressure and tension from within me. And renew my activity to return to school with all activity and vitality.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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126 words

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I need nothing more than to drain my energy so that I can release the pressure and tension from within me. And renew my activity to return to school with all activity and vitality.

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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country whew they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative?

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