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Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Owing to the hike in university fees and lack of
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 opportunities for graduates, a major public opinion has risen to abolish teaching arts
subjects
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 like philosophy and history to enhance employment prospects. In my opinion,
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 degree holders have low appeal in the
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 market.
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, these
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 are essential for the greater good of individuals and society.
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subjects
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 on campuses. Currently, the world is on the verge of a technological revolution. The development of technology has affected many fields
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 as engineering, finance, medicine, administration etc. Simultaneously, the
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 openings in these fields have expanded. Usually, people with technical education get drafted into these advanced fields.
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, the cost of higher education is increasing rapidly.
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, salaries paid in the technical field are ample enough to cover student loans and other expenditures. The students who specialized in arts have less employability and less attractive payments.
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, the demand for aesthetic education has fluctuated in recent times. Despite the perks in the tech field, arts and music develop mental and spiritual well-being.
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, a study found that more than 80 % of software engineers are suffering from stress and depression.
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, the research suggests engagement in
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-related activities can effectively reduce mental disorders.
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, modules like history, music,
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 and sculptures make an individual completely healthy. In conclusion, people prefer practical degrees over
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 degrees
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 rising costs and the shrinking
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 market.
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, teachings from
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subjects
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 are essential for a prosperous society.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural literacy
  • critical thinking
  • intellectual growth
  • preservation of culture
  • problem-solving skills
  • ethical reasoning
  • market unpredictability
  • innovation
  • holistic education
  • globalized world
  • historical contexts
  • multicultural environments
  • public service
  • media and arts management
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