The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart compares and contrasts the number of
people
who joined in
different Change preposition
apply
modules
in a educational institutions
. Correct the article-noun agreement
educational institutions
an educational institution
Whereas
, the pie chart illustrates the proportion of five different aged grouped people
in a
each Remove the article
apply
modules
.
Change to a singular noun
module
Overall
, women were more interested in attending evening modules
compared to men . On the other hand
, the
most amount of Correct article usage
apply
people
in each Correct article usage
the people
courses
were the oldest ones and the least Change to a singular noun
course
we're
the youngest.
Wrong verb form
we were
To begin
with , language accounted most
Change preposition
for most
women
Change noun form
women's
attendance
compared to other modules
, which was 40% . Whereas
, men
Change noun form
men's
attendance
ratio on
that section was two times lower than Change preposition
in
women
(20%) . Meanwhile , Change noun form
women's
painting
was the favourite course for most Add an article
the painting
men's
, and it accounted Change noun form
men
25
%. Change preposition
for 25
However
, for females , it was still higher than males
, which was 30%. Change preposition
for males
While
,
drama accounted 10%and 20% Remove the comma
apply
attendance
Change preposition
of attendance
rating
respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
ratings
By contrast
, the least proportion joining rating for sculpture, and it
was 10% and 30% respectively.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
On the other hand
, oldest
Correct article usage
the oldest
people
were the most common candidate in every module and they constituted 45% of participants
. Meanwhile , 26% of Correct article usage
the participants
attendance
in each courses
was from 40 to 49 aged grouped Change to a singular noun
course
people
. While
11% and 16% of attendance
come for
adult groups . Change preposition
from
However
, least
candidate for each Correct article usage
the least
modules
was Change to a singular noun
module
from
youngsters , which was 5%.Change preposition
apply
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, modules, attendance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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