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Several languages die every year. Many people feel this is a positive trend and that a world with fewer languages promotes harmony and understanding between people. Analyze both sides of this argument and provide your opinion.

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Some
people
 are of the opinion that, with
languages
 diminishing every year, it is believed
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 a positive impact on
people
 by promoting more peace and compatibility
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 them. There are many pros and cons to
this
 belief and I am of the opinion that
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 nation having a single
language
 would certainly help in maintaining amicable relationships. Some of the Countries,
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 a single
language
definetely
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definitely
 share a better bond compared to the rest.
This
 helps them to maintain a balance in the nation with no discrimination, as they speak the same
language
 and they find comfort
while
 communicating. The bonding between
people
 becomes stronger when you find that comfort
while
 communicating with the other.
For instance
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speak
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Mandarin
 and so does the entire nation,
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this
 they share
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 strongest bond amongst them and share a great relationship
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 their kind.
However
, there are others who think that with the lost
languages
, a lot of history and their culture is forgotten. In a country like India, where
people
 come from diverse backgrounds with different
languages
, it becomes difficult to find that common ground to interact with another person which has caused a lot of disparity amongst
people
. In India, every State has a different
language
 and when we travel to a different State, it becomes difficult to communicate as they may not know their
language
.
However
, though they may have different
languages
 the national
language
 i.e., Hindi could be used to communicate. There have been instances where
people
 expect you to speak in their local
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language
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 very difficult for tourists or visitors.
Overall
, in my
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 as discussed
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 there are pros and cons to it and I believe that usage of single
language
 promotes better
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relationship
relationships
 amongst its
memebers
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members
 and the country together could strive for better development of the country.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic biodiversity
  • cultural homogeneity
  • dilutes
  • erases
  • unique forms
  • streamline
  • cognitive diversity
  • facilitate
  • marginalize
  • historical heritage
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