Many people welcome the opening of shopping areas near their homes. On the other hand , some people are strongly opposed to the construction of such facilities. If the opening of a large shopping centre in your neighbourhood were announced, would you support or oppose its construction? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer

When I was a student in high school I participated in Young Entrepreneurs program which was set up and supported by the government. Attending the program I completely understand how important economic and social development is for my
country
. As Uzbekistan is one of the youngest developing countries, in my opinion, it needs professionals who develop economics, technology and global relations.
Therefore
, after graduating from university, I am intending to come back to my homeland in order to contribute to the economic development of my
country
. I believe that I can affect positive changes in my
country
, and in the world through
Business
, since,
Business
principles can serve as the backbone for economic, political and social systems at all levels. After graduating from university, I will return to my
country
with not only a degree in
Business
Administration but
also
come back with a connection between countries which will lead to a
further
relationship between these two nations. I believe that these strong relationships help to create joint- ventures between South Korea and Uzbekistan.
As a result
, it can affect a lot of positive changes for both countries with bring new job opportunities. In short, my long-term goal is to obtain my bachelor's degree and create my own
business
to help Uzbekistan and the world’s economy to improve.
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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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