For a long time art has been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. However, nowadays people’s values have changed, and we tend to consider science, technology and business more important than arts. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to draw people’s attention to art?

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is the main feature which we separate from animals and which makes us human. With the development of technology,
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acceptance has changed a lot. Even though, for a long
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has been considered an essential part of all
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in the world. Nowadays, mankind's values have changed and people are more likely to consider science, technology and business more valuable and important than
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. After the 16 century, the world changed so much with the industrial revolution. It made a huge impact on every culture as it helped to expand the business with different
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and the industrial revolution supported to exchange of knowledge with different countries and
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.People began to migrate to different lands for finding their economical and financial well-being, but with all these sudden changes, some nations forgot to protect their
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and some powerful nations destroyed their
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.All these stubborn incidents caused to kill the
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and their
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and the world became a different place, for those who do not know, how to admire
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. Nowadays, a lot of nationalities try to show organise cultural events and exhibitions and some organisations try to find forbidden
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and
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. They support them by providing donations, but these things are not fairly enough to protect different
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and their
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. Every human being has a responsibility to change the present situation of dying
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and writing a poem, painting a picture, or singing a song can change their life forever. It has the power to develop the creativity inside you. Governments of the earth have a huge responsibility to protect
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. They should regulate and govern the people by protecting
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, they should create some laws and policies to protect the
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. Parents and schools should try to emerge the creativity of children and they should guide them to understand and experience the value of arts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM fields (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • evolve
  • technological advancements
  • overshadowing
  • financial pressures
  • practical careers
  • digital entertainment
  • accessible
  • integrated
  • curricula
  • fostering
  • emotional intelligence
  • public art projects
  • engage
  • interactive
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