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It is important for children to learn the difference between right nad wrong at n early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should be parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience.

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Children
 need to be guided and taught about right and wrong from an early age as it is the best time to build character. Some people argue that sometimes
punishment
 is needed to help them to understand about mistakes they conducted. I Agree with
this
 statement as long as the
punishment
 given is educative and no hitting is involved. I will elaborate
further
about
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 negative rewards that can be given to offspring in order to educate them.
To begin
 with,
children
 were born without any knowledge about
this
 life.
Therefore
, it is the responsibility of their parents to teach them how to behave well in society, and sometimes educative
punishment
 is needed when they commit bad acts. I believe that parents should carefully choose the kind of negative rewards that they will give to their
children
 as it may have appalling effects on their self-esteem and development. there are several methods of
punishment
 that can be allowed for
children
.
Firstly
, responsibility to do household chores on the weekend. I see that many modern
family
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 pose
this
 kind of
punishment
 to their
children
 when they do something bad,
such
 as not finishing their
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home work
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 or fighting with their peers
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