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The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic games. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic games. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.
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The given table depicts the top ten countries which won the medal in the London Olympic Games in the year 2012.
Overall
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, it is apparent that the United States won the highest
number
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 of
medals
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while
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 the least
number
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 of
medals
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won
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 by Hungary in
this
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 Olympic Games.
According to
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 the given information USA won the highest
number
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 of
medals
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, and they
also
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 got the highest
number
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 of
Gold
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 and Silver recorded as 46 and 29 respectively. China
hold
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 the second
position
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 with 88
medals
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 which included 38
Gold
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, 27 Silver and 23 Bronze. South Korea was in 5th
position
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 with 28
medals
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. Russia won more
medals
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 than the UK but still was
at
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in
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 4th
position
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 because UK participants won more
Gold
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medals
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 so, that’s why the UK was in 3rd
position
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.
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Furthermore
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 the other countries, Germany, France, Italy, Hungary and Australia won
medals
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 ranging
in
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apply
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between 17 to 45.
Least
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The least
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Gold
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medals
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won
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were won
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 by Australia, and they were in the 10th
position
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, medals, gold, position with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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