Some businesses now say that no one can smoke cigarettes in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. This is a good idea but it also takes away some of our freedom. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.

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The problem of smoking among the population is most acute in many countries, so governments and organizations apply sanctions and try to regulate the amount of cigarette consumption among citizens.
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, smoking in any form is prohibited in many public places. I believe that a
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is free to make his own choice in
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or against smoking, and limiting smoking areas is not the best option for reducing smoking rates.
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, limiting the places where smoking is allowed will not reduce the number of smokers, but only bring them inconvenience. A
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addicted to nicotine without a personal desire to quit a bad habit will find a way and a place, perhaps even violating official rules.
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, nowadays there are many other ways to use nicotine (electronic cigarettes, vapes, chewing tobacco), which can be used indoors
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but are more harmful to humans.
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, in the case of restrictions, an addicted
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can only harm himself with a large amount of
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consumed, but not reduce it.
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, the only effective way to quit smoking is a
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's personal desire for
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a goal. The restriction of smoking places only confine a
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's freedom of choice, but will not force him to give up the habit. Every adult adequate
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is free to choose his own path, even if some things harm him.
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, it is not possible to forbid people to visit the bathroom or canteen, because it is only their decision.
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, I strongly believe that governments and businesses can come up with ideas not related to
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of people’s freedom. It seems to me that the stimulation
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desire of quitting a bad habit will bring more benefices than
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limitation of smoking areas
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can lead to an increase in nicotine consumption.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • restrictions
  • adverse health impacts
  • secondhand smoke
  • lung cancer
  • heart disease
  • respiratory conditions
  • inclusive environment
  • exacerbated
  • impinge
  • greater good
  • healthcare costs
  • productive workforce
  • designated smoking areas
  • compromise
  • public awareness campaigns
  • punitive
  • strategy
  • lifestyle choices
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