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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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sometimes it is argued that In a number of countries, some
people
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 think it is necessary to spend large sums of
money
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 on constructing new
railway
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lines
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 for very fast
trains
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 between cities
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 Others believe the
money
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 should be spent on improving existing public
transport
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.
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 , I support that the
money
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 should be spent on improving existing public
transport
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. on the one hand ,it is true that spending large sums of
money
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 on constructing new
railway
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lines
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 for very fast
trains
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 between cities leads to some advantages . 
firstly
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 , government construct new
railway
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lines
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 for very fast
trains
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 between cities which can make technological innovation, because engineers need to upgrade the equipment and very fast
trains
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 that match the new
railway
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lines
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,
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,it can create more jobs for
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 and increase individual income.
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 , it can improve competitiveness and high-speed
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 would benefit the country's economy,
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 it
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 can improve the national status.
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 , I agree that the
money
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 should be spent on improving existing public
transport
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.
firstly
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 ,if they invest sums of
money
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 in constructing
railway
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lines
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 the engineers need to spend huge
money
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 to invent the new equipment,
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 it increases the burden on the government financial .
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, the existing public
transport
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 has more important concerns, the government have a responsibility to raise
people
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's standard of living
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 improving existing public
transport
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 can make the public transportation more efficient and convenient and comfortable
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 it promotes the
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 well-being .
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 , improving existing public
transport
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 can increase the number of
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 taking public transportation,
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 it can reduce car fumes because fewer
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 drive their cars to go to work. in conclusion,both opinions have benefits ,but I prefer the
money
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 should be spent on improving existing public
transport
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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