TOPIC: In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

It is commonly argued that the authorities in many nations are justified in imposing a strict ban on smoking in public areas.
This
essay totally agrees with that statement because public
places
are where most
people
’s health can be adversely affected and those who
smoke
in the company of many others will set a bad example for young generations. The first reason why I consider it imperative that
smokers
be fined or punished for their acts in public locations is that puffing a cigarette in those
places
can put the majority of
people
’s health at risk.
This
is because public
places
are where a huge number of pedestrians, cyclists or office workers prefer to gather, and,
as a result
, allowing someone to
smoke
at their leisure in those
places
exposes many others to passive
smoke
, which in turn leads to more respiratory diseases
such
as lung cancer or breathing problems.
That is
why almost no restaurants or hotels in Vietnam allow their patrons, visitors and staff to
smoke
on their premises, but ,
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they would offer private rooms for
smokers
with a view to preventing them from doing harm to other
people
.
Further
support for my agreement with prohibition is that adolescents may model themselves as
smokers
in public
places
. As juveniles at impressionable ages are prone to mimicking what adults can legitimately do
such
as drinking or getting tattooed, the image of lighting a cigarette and creating a bubble from it stylishly in front of their awestruck friends can tempt youngsters into trying smoking first and
then
becoming compulsive
smokers
.
Therefore
, allowing adults to
smoke
in parks, shopping malls or game centres often frequented by young
people
may lead to a higher proportion of young smoking addicts in the future.
For instance
, many high school students in Vietnam are reported to secretly take up smoking after seeing their fathers or other family members consume a cigarette in crowded
places
. In conclusion, I strongly agree that prohibiting
people
from smoking in public
places
is justifiable because that would protect the public’s health from second-hand
smoke
and deter young
people
from becoming future
smokers
.
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