Nowadays, more people move away from their friends and families for work. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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these days, many individuals move away from their relatives,

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as friends and families, looking for

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with, it is undeniable that a big part of the population try to move away to faraway places for work. It is common, especially among young people, but between elderly individuals far too little. Spontaneously, these conditions cause homesickness, missing

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, and many more. As an example, it is true that

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working in another country to faraway

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originates unaware internal conflicts in their family,

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their family members

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the national report agency, within a decade, about

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portion of the population working

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countries, many of them as breadwinners.

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, there are many advantages to working in

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foreign nations.

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many people go to

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faraway places

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find a lucrative job.

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, they can achieve personal growth and,

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, gain

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ample independence in their personal lives.

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, it is undeniable that, nowadays, many mankind earn a lot of money for their reputation and comfortable life.

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, they are learned responsibilities

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their experiences,

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paying bills,

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extra subjects, and they can easily learn about secrets of modern jobs,

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and artificial intelligence. In conclusion, both sides have efficient effects on the government.

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many clever people move away to foreign countries

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cancel their

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job. For that, the ministry should approach

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problem with humility and clarity.